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The Gift of a Scream by *NobodysSon:iconNobodysSon:





Oh Jack, my dear pumpkin child. How I wish that you could speak this night. The shadows are busy with restless life, and the moon is like a great blind eye vainly trying to see. It is Halloween, Jack! And I cannot help but wish, as always, that I had given you a voice.

I know that you forgive me for that oversight, my son. No one has had as faithful a child as you. Yet still, you are young, and there are years yet for you to grow to despise me. A voice is a wonderful thing to have and never more so than on this enchanted night!

It was on an evening exactly like this one that I created you, my son. With the power of my voice I lured the elusive spark of Life into your sturdy stick limbs and orange visage. I was lonely, so lonely, and wanted to have a loyal son to love and cherish - and such a fine son I have made!

Come, Jack, look out the window. Do you see the land beginning to stir in the darkness? The sun is like a memory and dawn is a thing of myth. See how the torn clouds flutter like flags, and the sluggish mists roil! On a night exactly like this, Jack, one year ago, I created you. How impatiently I waited for your stiff limbs to tremble! I despaired at ever seeing light kindle in your empty eyes. But you awoke, Jack! Do you remember? You rose up from that very table which stands there, and stood before me like something from a dream. A silent dream... Alas, my boy, I cannot forget your lack of a voice.

Halloween is an important time to have one, my pumpkin son. There is a special sound that one can make this night which has more meaning now than at any other time of the year. It is called a Scream, Jack, and it is something that only someone with a voice can make. For this entire long year I have fretted as tonight approached, not knowing what to do. The idea of my own son not being able to scream on Halloween night fills me with shame and grief.

But I have come to a decision, Jack! I have made up my mind to give you a voice this very moment!

Here, my dear son, lay upon the table as you did what now seems so long ago. Do not be afraid! This is the very same knife that I used to make your eyes and nose, and to trim your wooden arms and legs. You must lay very still, Jack, for to give you a voice you will need a mouth, and a mouth is not an easy thing to make. You do want a voice don't you? Yes, yes, I see that you do, and I shall give you one so that you may scream this night.


How the form on the table shudders and bucks as the old man goes about his work. With a hand almost as gnarled and hard as his creation's own he holds the writhing figure by the throat, sawing at the soft orange flesh of poor Jack's face. Blood, thin and pale as vegetable juice, but blood nonetheless, spurts upon the table top as the blade slices deeper and deeper.

"Do you hear it, Jack!" the old man cries, as twig fingers claw at his face, tearing deep grooves in the wrinkled skin. "Do you hear it?"

For indeed a sound is rising in the dim room. Soft at first, easily mistaken for the chill breeze whispering beyond the window glass, but growing steadily with each rasping passage of the knife through pumpkin flesh. Now it is as tiny and shrill as a boiling tea kettle grating in the bloody ears that Jack has half torn from his father's skull. Growing, ever growing, as does the widening split in the pumpkin son's face. Now it battles for dominance with the howl of Halloween shades awaking once more beneath a starless sky. Hear it as it  rises screeching towards the ceiling intertwined with the muffled shrieks of anguish coming from the old man who struggles to free the voice of his thrashing son whom he loves so much.

The last cuts are sloppy and ragged but Jack will have to forgive his father for with the poor man's eyes pierced by his own thorn-sharp fingers, he could no longer see his handiwork.  As the last pulpy strings of flesh part before the sharp knife, Jack finally manages to hurl his antagonist aside like a broken doll. A great hole now gapes in his once blank face, and from that hole comes the most treasured noise of all to be heard on any Halloween night:

A Scream. A wonderful, agonized scream!

From where the old man lays sprawled upon the floor, his blinded face a mask of blood, half of his body smoldering unheeded upon the glowing coals of the fireplace, that sound is the most beautiful thing in the world. He ends what is his last Halloween, and Jack's very first, listening to his dear son scream, and scream, and scream, and scream, and...
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The illustration for this story was drawn by :iconazmeld: as a request. I entered and won a Halloween contest at :iconstory-club: with this piece and gave the 3 month sub prize to her as a thank you.

I wrote this while considering the dying month in which we are while looking out the window at the rain drenched day. I am hoping to submit this in one of dA's Halloween contests so I would appreciate any constructive critique.

Just for the hell of it, no, this story has nothing to do with The Nightmare Before Christmas.
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I'm sitting here, with my mouth wide open, my breath coming in really shallowly.
That was freaking amazingly freaky.

Instant favorite. I will read this every Halloween and more, again and again and again...

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Ooh. :wow: I love it!

The imagery is great -- morbid, sticky, deliciously detailed. It makes a great Halloween piece. =D The opening monologue was a bit lengthy -- I would've loved a quip in there about the old man staring out the window, or about his surroundings, after the first two paragraphs --- but I suppose it does add to the mystery and alone-ness of it all. =D Oh yes, and I was especially fond of this line:

"Blood, thin and pale as vegetable juice, but blood nonetheless, spurts upon the table top as the blade slices deeper and deeper...."

It flows smoothly and conjures a great picture. :clap: Kudos. On all of it. :dance:

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It is a relief to hear that. I value your opinion as I value your writing skills. I was and am really unsure of this piece.

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"Tiger got to hunt, bird got to fly; Man got to sit and wonder, 'Why, why, why?' Tiger got to sleep, bird got to land; Man got to tell himself he understand." - Kurt Vonnegut
Thank you so much :)

I will certainly consider breaking the monologue up a bit with some small actions.

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You really shouldn't be unsure at all. It was amazing. I've decided that I completely love it and will share it as much as is possible, if that's okay with you.

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Thanks again :blush: Yes, by all means, share it if you wish.

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"Tiger got to hunt, bird got to fly; Man got to sit and wonder, 'Why, why, why?' Tiger got to sleep, bird got to land; Man got to tell himself he understand." - Kurt Vonnegut
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! I'll probably read it to my roommate and scare the mickey out of her.

Which reminds me... today I was watching Dirty Jobs on the discovery channel and one was attracting and tagging sharks and they caught one and it was so scared it gave birth. He scared the baby out of her. :lmao:

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That is gross lol So so sooooo gross. I thought that sharks would lay eggs :confused:

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"Tiger got to hunt, bird got to fly; Man got to sit and wonder, 'Why, why, why?' Tiger got to sleep, bird got to land; Man got to tell himself he understand." - Kurt Vonnegut
Well, see, the gross factor was attracting the shark. They had to put whole fish through a meat grinder over and over again and the guy actually puked.
But yeah, the shark being scared in to giving birth was pretty weird.
And sharks and several types of other fish don't lay eggs. :shrug: I don't know why.

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